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| mat_j | Posted: Mon Apr 17 20:51:19 2006 | Post | Quote in Reply |
| There's a body in the quarry
with a hole in his bible They don't make 'em like they used to- he said. There's a hatchet in the stump Near the old town dump And the ground's warm enough the bake bread. And it's so damn hot It seems like we all forgot That those fellers wouldn't kill themselves. So with beer and supplies We set off with squitnted eyes Nearly cleared Sam Hills Ammo shelves. With guns on our backs we gave lizards heart attacks As we broke the yellow grass on the way. When we reached that old house We gave a rag a gas'line douse started off by burning a bail of hay. And as the sun got higher You couldn't quite perspire 'Cause it just came off as steam. They fled one by one To the barrels of our guns and it seemed like the devils wet dream. There's a body in the quarry but he's the lucky one laid down to rest without shame and though the sun may be high And there's blow fly in his eye It sure beats the hell out of these flames. |
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| mat_j | Posted: Mon Apr 17 22:45:06 2006 | Post | Quote in Reply |
| Feel free to chop it up!
please |
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| Cherry_Moon | Posted: Tue Apr 18 14:07:12 2006 | Post | Quote in Reply |
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mat_j said:
>Feel free to chop it up! meh. nope! you did a great job... I'm having issues writing poems these days. i guess the one complaint is it's too damn long. but aside from that the content, format, etc was very good. i miss you posting! |
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| choke | Posted: Tue Apr 18 14:50:57 2006 | Post | Quote in Reply |
| I'm lately starting to enjoy poetry like this more and more. It was good for my brain. Thanks MatJ |
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| mat_j | Posted: Fri Apr 21 12:53:03 2006 | Post | Quote in Reply |
| thanks guys much appreciated!!
CM did you say that this poem was too long or another i don't understand?? It's really not that long, one of the shortest i wrote??!?!?!?! |
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| Billy Pilgrim | Posted: Thu Jul 19 12:02:26 2007 | Post | Quote in Reply |
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You recorded this yet T? |
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| mat_j | Posted: Tue Jul 27 08:06:42 2010 | Post | Quote in Reply |
| Yes, yes I have 'S' but the recording was shitty |
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| Cherry_Moon | Posted: Tue Jul 27 11:08:18 2010 | Post | Quote in Reply |
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mat_j said:
>CM did you say that this poem was too long or another i don't understand?? It's really not that long, one of the shortest i wrote??!?!?!?! it's not awful in length - you did ask for critism. it's really a minor niggly complaint. it is a great poem. |
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